A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
While acknowledging that the implementation of such recommendation can cause some disruption under some circumstances, I still agree that the recommendation should be adopted. Reason for saying so is elucidated in the points below.
To buttress my point, let’s take analysis of three elementary school student in same society or country. The first person offered total of 20 subjects throughout his elementary school with vocational studies excluded, the second person offered total of 18 subject with quantitative reasoning excluded and finally the third person offered total of 23 subjects with verbal reasoning, quantitative reasoning and vocational studies included. Imagine a scenario where by these pupils want to enter high school and needs to write a national standardized exam for all elementary students aiming to enter high school. Suppose the exam comprises of subjects which includes vocational studies, critical writing and verbal reasoning; without much thought, one can estimate the fate of those students. Obviously, in course of the exam, the first two students have high probability of finding the exam difficult whereas the third person has high chances of tackling the problem with ease. Consequently, the first two pupils will perform poorly. One question that needs to be answered is, who should be held culpable for the pupils’ failure in the exam? Should it be the schools, the pupil or the government? For me I will choose the latter. That is the government.
Admittedly, I would have love to choose the schools rather than the government, reason been that the school derailed by not preparing the pupils adequately for the standardized exam. But how can schools with different idiosyncrasies and objectives teach same course? Take for example, in Nigeria we have American schools. These schools rather than use normal curriculum found in most Nigerian elementary and high school, use American curriculum. Such schools end up preparing the high school students to take SAT- their own country’s- standard exam for all aiming to enter the university, neglecting to prepare them for JAMB, which is the standardized exam for Nigerians students aiming for Nigerian university. In reality, not all the student that went to the American school will have enough finance to progress to the university. If such students end up passing SAT, but fails JAMB, what’s the point? Hence, in order to reconcile the differences in teaching focus, it is in the jurisdiction of the government to create a standard by creating a national curriculum whereby every school -be it kindergarten, elementary or high school- have a recognized subject which are to be offered at each level. By so doing, the government promotes and strengthen standard in the education system. Additionally, when students offer the same curriculum, there performance can easily be graded. Referring back to the hypothetical students mentioned earlier in this essay, assume they offered all the subjects and undergo the standardized exam, it will be a better reflection of each student’s capacity. There is every tendency that those two student that failed previously might pass.
However, critiques might argue that adopting such recommendation will lead to infringement in the autonomy of schools especially the “unique school” which specific objective or certain idiosyncrasies propels their existence. The rigidness of the national curriculum- if it against such school- might strangle them to death. Take for instance Christian school. The objective of such religious school majorly is to raise God fearing students that will make Christ the center of their lifes. Hence their focus will be more on morals. Hence subjects such as Christian religious knowledge (CRK) and Moral instruction are there key subject. Suppose in course of trying to create a national curriculum, CRK is scrapped, of what essence is the existence of the school afterwards, when its main objective has been defeated? Furthermore, imagine an Islamic school who gets deprived of teaching Islamic Religious Studies (IRS) and Arabic language because it’s not included in the national curriculum. Hasn’t she lost her essence? Of course yes.
Nevertheless, some government eg Nigeria who have adopted a general curriculum are judicious while creating national curriculum. They make efforts to ensure that courses in the national curriculum does not totally undermine the essence of the unique schools. This is achieved by giving the students the option of electives for the standardized exams. For instance, a high school student in an Islamic school can choose to write IRS in Senior Secondary Certificate Exam (SSCE) -exam compulsory for all student aiming for the tertiary institution- and another high school student in a Christian missionary school can choose to write CRK.
In conclusion, creating national curriculum provides avenue for government to constantly monitor the academic learning of students. Also, it creates a standard for measuring all students-at any level- their IQ and level of understanding, hence promoting fairness.
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flaws:
No. of Words: 793 350 //Write the essay in 30 minutes. You have good languages and ideas. but less content wanted from examples. Maximum 600 words in total.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 40 15
No. of Words: 793 350
No. of Characters: 4201 1500
No. of Different Words: 351 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.298 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.831 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 338 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 261 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 187 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 114 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.825 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.768 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.525 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.234 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.395 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'student' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'students'.
Suggestion: students
...ake analysis of three elementary school student in same society or country. The first p...
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Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereby'?
Suggestion: whereby
...al studies included. Imagine a scenario where by these pupils want to enter high school ...
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Line 3, column 628, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
... to enter high school. Suppose the exam comprises of subjects which includes vocational stud...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'school'
Suggestion: school
... for the standardized exam. But how can schools with different idiosyncrasies and objec...
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Line 5, column 600, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ming to enter the university, neglecting to prepare them for JAMB, which is the s...
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Line 5, column 1675, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dent that failed previously might pass. However, critiques might argue that adop...
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Line 7, column 491, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... make Christ the center of their lifes. Hence their focus will be more on morals. Hen...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...nce their focus will be more on morals. Hence subjects such as Christian religious kn...
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Line 9, column 435, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...slamic school can choose to write IRS in Senior Secondary Certificate Exam (SSCE)...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'third', 'whereas', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'of course', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251995438997 0.240241500013 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.163055872292 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103762827822 0.0880659088768 118% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0342075256556 0.0497285424764 69% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0285062713797 0.0444667217837 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106043329532 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0513112884835 0.0406280797675 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93403482443 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0273660205245 0.030933414821 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00228050171038 0.0016655270985 137% => OK
Determiners: 0.106043329532 0.0997080785238 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0228050171038 0.0249443105267 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0193842645382 0.0148568991511 130% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 5134.0 2732.02544248 188% => OK
No of words: 792.0 452.878318584 175% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.48232323232 6.0361032391 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.30495000532 4.58838876751 116% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.44696969697 0.366273622748 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.35101010101 0.280924506359 125% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.257575757576 0.200843997647 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159090909091 0.132149295362 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93403482443 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 367.0 219.290929204 167% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463383838384 0.48968727796 95% => OK
Word variations: 61.1936767407 55.4138127331 110% => OK
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6194690265 194% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 19.8 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.077265417 59.4972553346 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.35 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.55 0.674092028746 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 54.901010101 51.4728631049 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.81313131313 1.64882698954 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496701265211 0.391690518653 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0881141445157 0.123202303941 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0727906001359 0.077325440228 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.432404039226 0.547984918172 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189333361065 0.149214159877 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164549007487 0.161403998019 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980220334823 0.0892212321368 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.422458478402 0.385218514788 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.134059870477 0.0692045440612 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325980687845 0.275328986314 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850225643572 0.0653680567796 130% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.30420353982 245% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88274336283 287% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 3.66592920354 327% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 29.0 13.5995575221 213% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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