Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed .Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning

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Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed .
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The statement suggests that nations should stop funding arts when some of their citizens are hungry or unemployed. However, the government funding for arts, which helps arts flourish, does not threaten the economic condition; yet, it promotes the overall employment situation. Nations should therefore not cease to fund arts.

Many people currently work in the art-related fields. Arts have many forms such as movies, museums, music, literature, stage performances, and many others. A considerable number of people are employed in these areas such as movie staff, actors, and artists. These people can keep their job only if arts are prosperous, which is largely dependent on government funding. If adopting the recommendation, arts will dwindle and subsequently a significant number of people will lose their jobs. Therefore, nations should not stop funding to make the already existing unemployment worse.

To continue, arts inspire creativities and therefore promote the overall success of a nation’s economy which consequently help increase employment market. Arts are ubiquitous in the economic world such as advertising, construction, and home goods. For examples, virtually every company is trying to advertise their products by creating the most captivating images, which relates to arts. With companies grow, the overall economy, which will then increase employment opportunities. If adopting the policy, the economy will be deprived of a major source of creativity, arts, which will cause the job market to decline. Hence, it is necessary for a nation to keep funding arts so as to bolster the overall economy and the job market.

However, one may argue that there are still other ways of funding arts such as private funds. Nevertheless, private funding, compared to government funding, is primarily driven by personal interests and only permeate certain amount of population and fields, which therefore is not comparable to government funding in benefiting the overall economy.

In addition, people have the rights and needs to enjoy the work of arts. Admittedly, many people are hungry in virtually every country. Still, the majority of people are working and paying taxes and need all kinds of arts for entertainment and empowerment. It is not right for a nation to suspend funding for arts, diminish their advancement, and violate people’s needs. This is especially true for those low-income workers as they often rely on free access to arts, which is largely granted by government funding. If adopting the policy, many art events would not be free, leaving many citizens to miss opportunities of enjoying a more colorful and nourishment life. Therefore, though a number of people are unemployed, a nation should not suspend funding for arts.

In conclusion, a nation should never stop looking at different ways to solve its unemployment issue; nevertheless, suspending government funding for arts is not one of them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...the overall economy and the job market. However, one may argue that there are st...
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... funding for arts is not one of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2504.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4672489083 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92600859306 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497816593886 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7449365422 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.16 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.32 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302552252213 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929697680523 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604030410541 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176049813215 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518829457467 0.0667264976115 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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flaws:
It still has issues. You ignored the condition: 'when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed .'

the arguments should be closely related to the topic, for example, we may say:

Maybe the funding for the arts by government is a small amount in the total government funding, so even though it is suspended, still a significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed .

or something like this:
If Nations suspend government funding for the arts, those who already benefit by the funding will be hungry or unemployed.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2401 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.242 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.766 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.32 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.137 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.76 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5