"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the numb

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"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."

While it may true that number of shoppers affected by increased number of skateboarders in Central Plaza, this author does not make a cogent case for decreased number of shoppers. Author also argues that many central plaza store owners believes their business is decreases by number of skateboard user increased and also states amount of litter and vandalism increased, this increased amount due to skateboarding therefore author claim’s that Central Plaza need to prohibit skateboarding. However, argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to business run regularly by prohibiting skateboarding.

To begin with, the argument claims that last two years number of skateboarders increase in Central Plaza, therefore this effect appeared in shoppers of Central Plaza decreased. This is fundamentally incorrect, there may be no connection between skateboarders and shoppers. Also, in Central Plaza shoppers population is decreased and skateboarders increased. So, without supportive evidence we could not assume that shoppers decreased because of number of skateboarders increased.

Secondly, the argument about many Central Plaza owners believe that their business is reduce due to the number of skateboarders. Furthermore, author assert that amount of vandalism and litter increased in Central Plaza. There is no such evidence states that business affected by skateboard user. There may be business reduced by more competition among them. Also, author failed to mention that how vandalism and litter increase. There may be litter and vandalism increased due to business reduction in Central Plaza.

In finally, author recommend to city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza and this will leads to business come to its regular high levels. This decision of forbid skateboarding not sure Central Plaza business reach its high levels because of lack of evidence. There may be business reduced due to another reasons like vandalism and litter, Hence, people avoid shopping from Central Plaza. Consequently, author need to elaborate business reduction reasons and also needs to state powerful evidence that supports skateboarding prohibiting is beneficial.

In general, it may be said that the author need to provide more information and evidence on, who is responsible for litter and vandalism?, what is the reason for business reduction in Central Plaza?, why shoppers decreased and popularity of skateboarding increased? Thus, it would have been wise for the author of this argument to consider all these points before coming up with decision of prohibit skateboarding will leads to business growing.

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Average: 6 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
...a owners believe that their business is reduce due to the number of skateboarders. Fur...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...boarding in Central Plaza and this will leads to business come to its regular high le...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 420, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...decision of prohibit skateboarding will leads to business growing.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in general, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97085425425 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7422962593 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.736842105 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437015562174 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164969379548 0.0831039109588 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121997350892 0.0758088955206 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286737720953 0.150359130593 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855319846893 0.0667264976115 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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