It is human nature to look for shortcuts. When we have an easier way of doing something, we do not take the longer path in order to avoid trouble. As the world is advancing, it is making our lives easier. Many problems faced in the olden times which required a lot of physical as well as mental effort are now only a matter of a few clicks. Since technology has entered every home, office and school, there is an increased tendency to depend on it to get our jobs done. I agree with the fact that human dependence on technology has increased. This points at the suggestion made in the statement that the ability of humans to think for themselves will deteriorate in time. However, if this is realized at the correct time, such a situation can be avoided. Moreover, this may not be the case with every individual. The advancement of technology itself is a wonder of the human mind. It is only when great thinkers and learned people think on an individual level that development becomes possible.
Due to the advancement of technology we have now forgotten the pains taken to accomplish a task as was done before any development in that particular field was made. It is only when we are faced with problems that we make efforts to find a solution to it. We can find examples of this in history where it was only when people faced the problem of traveling long distances on foot and carrying heavy loads that made them think of a solution. This resulted in the invention of the wheel that made their work easier and less burdening. On the other hand, when there is no problem faced by us, we don't find the need to look for solutions and advancements.
The power of a human brain is unfathomable. However, it is important to keep the brain working by performing mental exercises. There were times when people relied on their mental abilities to perform calculations. This kept them mentally active and alert. However, as calculators came into existence, people started performing even simple calculations on the calculator. This is the reason why we are not able to solve a mathematical problem orally while our fathers, who did not use calculators, are still quick to solve the same. This indicates that we started depending upon calculators for every calculation, which made our brains dull and irresponsive to mental calculations. As the computer came into the world, it reduced our mental work even further.
If a machine were not used for a long time it would start creaking and eventually stop working. Our brain, like any machinery, needs to be exercised in order to keep it working. Therefore, it is on us to exercise our thinking abilities and keep ourselves active. If we depend too much upon technology and avoid mental exercise, it would definitely deteriorate our thinking abilities. Therefore, along with taking the benefits of technology, we should develop a habit of thinking and solving problems at our own. Students should be encouraged to develop a problem-solving attitude by giving them tasks related to finding solutions. Similarly, we must calculate our monthly budget without any help. Instead of turning to the interiors of our homes and offices in the hot weather, we should think about the possible solutions to reduce global warming. Likewise, it is only when we give a personal thought on how to save fuel that practical solutions like sharing vehicles to schools and offices can be sought.
As I have discussed earlier, technology is a creation of the human mind. This development is possible only because of the advancement of human thinking abilities. However, we must make it a point that we do not become a slave to the advancement of technology and retain our thinking abilities, which would keep the development going.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...to depend on it to get our jobs done. I agree with the fact that human dependence on technology has incr...
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Line 1, column 925, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...is only when great thinkers and learned people think on an individual level that devel...
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Line 4, column 594, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...hen there is no problem faced by us, we dont find the need to look for solutions and...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'likewise', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'as well as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20197740113 0.240241500013 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.190677966102 0.157235817809 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0706214689266 0.0880659088768 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0522598870056 0.0497285424764 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0762711864407 0.0444667217837 172% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114406779661 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0536723163842 0.0406280797675 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78353181435 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0353107344633 0.030933414821 114% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.100282485876 0.0997080785238 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0183615819209 0.0249443105267 74% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.024011299435 0.0148568991511 162% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3766.0 2732.02544248 138% => OK
No of words: 644.0 452.878318584 142% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84782608696 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0375743251 4.58838876751 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321428571429 0.366273622748 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.251552795031 0.280924506359 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195652173913 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130434782609 0.132149295362 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78353181435 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 219.290929204 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465838509317 0.48968727796 95% => OK
Word variations: 57.9324759746 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6194690265 175% => OK
Sentence length: 17.8888888889 23.380412469 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2509077597 59.4972553346 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.611111111 141.124799967 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 23.380412469 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.388888888889 0.674092028746 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 43.044168392 51.4728631049 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.1592920354 1.64882698954 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396484187394 0.391690518653 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108163462618 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0844537510643 0.077325440228 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.428709884508 0.547984918172 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121761636448 0.149214159877 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132751268839 0.161403998019 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689480070543 0.0892212321368 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.410323415597 0.385218514788 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0787484053103 0.0692045440612 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281723600434 0.275328986314 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480566174993 0.0653680567796 74% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.4325221239 182% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.30420353982 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 29.0 13.5995575221 213% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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