People’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Every individual would be affected by their surroundings, both the present situation and the whole society. However, which one would be the most effective toward a person? In my stance, I support that the immediate situation would have more influence than the whole society to one's attitude for the following reasons.
First of all, the immediate situation directly and the closest affects people, while the society influence would be far away. To illustrate, if a country which is positive and justice, while one person accompany with greedy and corrupt friends and family, the person would have a great chance to become a craven and greedy person. It is because that the living circle of the person is full of greedy and negative things. Even the society is prosper and advanced, there are still some people who live in poverty and do not have adequate educate and cause their attitude would incline to negative.
Secondly, according to the psychology, people would act more proper when they aware that some others are watching than the time when there is no one looking at. In this circumstance, the whole society is not changed, but the local surrounding is distinct between someone is spotting or not. For instance, labors might not dare to be lazy when the managers are monitoring. On the contrary, if there is no one monitor on them, they have a chance to take a rest. Thus, the immediate circumstance would affect one's attitude more than the society.
Admittedly, the society still have their effects on people, like education and well-fare. Notwithstanding, the immediate situation has a directly and immediately effect on people. For example, someone faces a lot of pressure and want to suicide, in the moment, if the friends or family could help the depressing person, then the person might not commit suicide. On the contrary, no matter how positive a society is, it might not assuage one person's pain.
To sum up, although both society and the immediate situation have influence toward people's attitude, the present condition might play the main role in making the decision and decide the attitude.
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Essay evaluation report
between someone is spotting or not.
between someone who is spotting or not. //after 'between' no sentence
flaws:
Need more arguments after the topic sentence in the fourth paragraph: the society still have their effects on people, like education and well-fare.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1715 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.872 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.489 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ore influence than the whole society to ones attitude for the following reasons. ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 442, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'prospered'.
Suggestion: prospered
...nd negative things. Even the society is prosper and advanced, there are still some peop...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...the immediate circumstance would affect ones attitude more than the society. Admi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
... a lot of pressure and want to suicide, in the moment, if the friends or family could help th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'first of all', 'on the contrary', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219143576826 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.138539042821 0.157235817809 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.088161209068 0.0880659088768 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0579345088161 0.0497285424764 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0251889168766 0.0444667217837 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0931989924433 0.12292977631 76% => OK
Participles: 0.0226700251889 0.0406280797675 56% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60460395778 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0226700251889 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.00251889168766 0.0016655270985 151% => OK
Determiners: 0.125944584383 0.0997080785238 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0327455919395 0.0249443105267 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0176322418136 0.0148568991511 119% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2119.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 352.0 452.878318584 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01988636364 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377840909091 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301136363636 0.280924506359 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.1875 0.200843997647 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113636363636 0.132149295362 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60460395778 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 219.290929204 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 54.1439846237 55.4138127331 98% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7058823529 23.380412469 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8674473975 59.4972553346 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.647058824 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 23.380412469 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.05882352941 0.674092028746 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 50.8195187166 51.4728631049 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.51136363636 1.64882698954 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397017741328 0.391690518653 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109046831042 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0652012402059 0.077325440228 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.597792049813 0.547984918172 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140108369822 0.149214159877 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176754250098 0.161403998019 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695603703531 0.0892212321368 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.394436669319 0.385218514788 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0341222326707 0.0692045440612 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283441172714 0.275328986314 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450836366187 0.0653680567796 69% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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