People's behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supportin

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People's behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Human beings have a complex mind and they tend to have a sporadic behaviour. The author’s claim that people’s decision or behaviour is generally determined by the external pressure seems plausible. There are various cases in which an individual has taken an extreme steps due to the peer pressure or in influence of someone.

We live in a society, where everyone has a tendency to judge us for our actions. We think twice before making any decision and we ourself has become judgemental for judging people for their actions. Our decisions or behaviours are largely influenced by our surroundings.

To illustrate that let’s look at this example, why it is always difficult for an individual to come of the closet and accept his/her sexuality, because of the fear of judgement and not being accepted by the society. Due to this fear an individual led his whole life in belying about his sexuality. This is quite obvious that his behaviour and judgement is influenced by the external forces.

Moreover, peer pressure also plays a vital role in impacting one’s decision making. Due to peer pressure they tend to take wrong steps and end up harming them. In India, there are higher number of suicide rates among students than any other country, studies have shown that this is due to the peer pressure. In peer pressure, they are not capable of think properly and happened to take such radical steps. So we can definitely say that people's behaviour is largely determined by outside forces.

In conclusion, People's behaviour is greatly affected by their surroundings, society and community they are living. They should understand that it is highly vital to take proper decision which are not influenced by any other measures, but by their owns.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...fore making any decision and we ourself has become judgemental for judging people f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06506849315 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75666637698 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541095890411 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.07714719 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4375 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141046261845 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501455059913 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366288962703 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828148751643 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312085906054 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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