A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.

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A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.

A criminal who has intentionally committed a crime should be barred from all the civil rights. As convincing as this statement sounds, refraining the criminal from usage of all his rights is a bit extreme. Although, in my opinion it should be dependent on the severity and circumstances of the crime he has committed instead of taking extreme actions for all sorts of crime.

Taking the case of Ajmal Kasab, who was one of the terrorists behind the 26/11 Mumbai attacks in India. He and his accomplices took so many innocent lives without even considering once who are they killing. Such a criminal is not worthy of any civil rights. In fact, when he was to be presented in the court, none of the defence lawyers wanted to represent his case. To get a lawyer was his right but nobody wanted to give him this right. So, in case of such a heinous crime the civil rights which a criminal possess should be barred from him.

As in the first case, the accused of Nithari case, a pedophile who sexually tortured children and then murdered them should not be given any civil right either. This person, Moninder Sharma killed thousands of children leaving their parents to suffer in their agony does not deserve to get any kind of social justice. If these criminals are allowed to use their rights other criminals will get encouraged and it is required ti instill fear in criminals so that crimes can be stopped.

Having said this, there are crimes where a criminal is bound to commit a crime. For example, if a girl is getting assaulted sexually and she gets a chance to hurt the person and defend herself then she has no other option other than hurting him and thus committing this crime. In case of self defense, it becomes mandatory for a person to commit crimes on their will but will it be justifiable if they will not be able to retain any of their civil rights.

Any person who is committing a crime knowingly is guilty of the crime they have committed but refraining all the criminals from the usage of their rights is not justified. The conditions and severity of the crimes should definitely be taken into consideration while making such impactful decisions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rime. Taking the case of Ajmal Kasab, who was one of the terrorists behind the...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216019417476 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.196601941748 0.157235817809 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0606796116505 0.0880659088768 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0485436893204 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0679611650485 0.0444667217837 153% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114077669903 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0728155339806 0.0406280797675 179% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50577664997 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0266990291262 0.030933414821 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.109223300971 0.0997080785238 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242718446602 0.0249443105267 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0194174757282 0.0148568991511 131% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2172.0 2732.02544248 80% => OK
No of words: 383.0 452.878318584 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67101827676 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342036553525 0.366273622748 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.219321148825 0.280924506359 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148825065274 0.200843997647 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0913838120104 0.132149295362 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50577664997 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 219.290929204 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485639686684 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 51.8992141587 55.4138127331 94% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.5294117647 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4536886718 59.4972553346 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.764705882 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.674092028746 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 44.4615266472 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.28682170543 1.64882698954 78% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334000989498 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121793967275 0.123202303941 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0726114954114 0.077325440228 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.536586373004 0.547984918172 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13890044759 0.149214159877 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140174248582 0.161403998019 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605830573644 0.0892212321368 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.335899859115 0.385218514788 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0488694152318 0.0692045440612 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228141897874 0.275328986314 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354943523435 0.0653680567796 54% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.4325221239 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.30420353982 264% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 7.22455752212 28% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 8.0 13.5995575221 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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The flaws of the essay are that paragraphs are all about examples (in the second and third paragraph). Need to give a reason first, then give arguments for this reason, then give examples to support this reason.

like this:

paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support side A.

paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).

paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).

paragraph 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support side A. first,....second...

paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.