Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much influence on our personality and development than any experience we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be major influence?
The statement says, that the characteristics we are born with have much influence on our personality and development. With recent changes in society, mindsets and mental attitudes its observed that parenting is the crucial role in building up character or a person. As the famous proverb quotes, “The hand that rocks the cradle rules the world’’. It implies that Motherhood or parenting and the concept that what a person becomes in his life starts with what they learn from their parents, teachers and elderly people. Ultimately, its societies influence which has a great impact on an individual’s life.
Characteristics are those features which distinguish an individual from another individual. For this the nurturing and parenting of a child should be appropriate so that the child would have proper knowledge of deciding the right and wrong. Some children’s are born with inborn ability to grasp things and respond to it. While, in some cases we can observe less response. For e.g. Some kids are so talented that they are able to know all sort of arts at very tender age of 2 to 6. At this time if a parent recognizes his ability and helps him to pursue to same field it will help him to excel in that felid. Now- a – days parents cant dedicate ample of time to their children’s due to which many a times the inbuilt talent is not known to them. So, in this case the teachers or other people who surrounding them can bring into notice of parents.
The characteristics we are born with have much influence on our personality and development than any experience we may have in our life. Its also implies that more over than our own experience in Life the characteristics are more pivotal. Some kids develop good characteristics while others due to peers pressure , imitating elders create a good character. In this case the when a parent or teaches see’s a child is doing wrong things he should be stopped immediately or else if the child continues to do same it will become a habit. And once habit is cultivated it grows to addictions and as we say “Habits die hard”, then its too difficult to give up a bad habit. Children’s can also learn form own personal experience and improvise themselves. Once they commit a mistake they should take a lesson from it & no repeat it again. This will help them to improve and develop into good human being. When they come to teenage its their own responsibility to strive for their personal development as parents cant always spoon-feed them.
My opinion is both things plays important rol at every stage of individuals life. In initial stages parents, teachers and elders should take care of building up a character while when an individual grows up its his own responsibility. Thus, we can say that characteristics are play role throughout the life as we know that “Character determines destiny.”
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, e.g., if, may, so, then, thus, while, sort of, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 490.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9387755102 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06716947485 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5588697593 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.8 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.64 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293083070173 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919954727166 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169160830277 0.0758088955206 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18014999456 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1063826501 0.0667264976115 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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