Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

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Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

With the pollution brought by human activities, many species are on the verge of extinction or have already died out. Therefore, the author claims that our society should take some actions to protect the endangered species from dying out only when the potential extinction is the result of human activities. From my point of view, I agree with the statement, but I also recommend that the protecting list should be extended to include the species which are not affected by human beings.

First, it is difficult to define the influences human activities have on the endangered species. Our earth is replete with hundreds of thousands of species, and most of them are closely interwoven with each other. Some of the human behaviours which can cause severe outcomes for specific species are normally overlooked by human themselves. For example, the over use of modern vehicles is often recognised as a cause leading to air pollution, which could affect the living conditions of some birds. However, such a human activity is also a major source of the overwhelming noise in our society, which has an impact on the lifespan of some small creatures, as they cannot tolerate the noise. Therefore, as human are not able to draw a accurate evaluation about the detriment they have on species, a more comprehensive protection plan should be made to not only involve the species directly affected by human but also the species which are previously ignored.

Also, the merit of protection of the natural species is obvious. As we all know, we people live in the earth have close interaction with the natural world. Natural species, the environment and us together form the ecological balance of the earth. If such a balance was undermined because of human activities or other reasons like collisions between earth and other stars, the environmental disasters it brings may ruin the prosperity of human civilisation. For example, the over hunting of some wild animals has resulted the disequilibrium of eco-system in Africa, thereby causing the drought or flood of some places, which kills a lot of people and leads to the economic dilemma of some countries. Therefore, a protection toward endangered species is indispensable and should be adopted immediately.

In sum, since we cannot comprehensively define the impact human activities have on the endangered species, we should take the responsibility for preserving them from extinction indiscriminately, as their death may cause an ecological catastrophe to our society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...are closely interwoven with each other. Some of the human behaviours which can cause severe...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...herefore, as human are not able to draw a accurate evaluation about the detriment...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22271714922 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.144766146993 0.157235817809 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0935412026726 0.0880659088768 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0601336302895 0.0497285424764 121% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0445434298441 0.0444667217837 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135857461024 0.12292977631 111% => OK
Participles: 0.0423162583519 0.0406280797675 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9497417108 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0178173719376 0.030933414821 58% => OK
Particles: 0.00445434298441 0.0016655270985 267% => OK
Determiners: 0.122494432071 0.0997080785238 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0244988864143 0.0249443105267 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0155902004454 0.0148568991511 105% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2516.0 2732.02544248 92% => OK
No of words: 407.0 452.878318584 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.18181818182 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375921375921 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.302211302211 0.280924506359 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213759213759 0.200843997647 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144963144963 0.132149295362 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9497417108 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 219.290929204 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5085995086 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 56.3545687632 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 25.4375 23.380412469 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1362613717 59.4972553346 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.25 141.124799967 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4375 23.380412469 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.674092028746 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 55.6586302211 51.4728631049 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.60714285714 1.64882698954 97% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.547775414989 0.391690518653 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138830180286 0.123202303941 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0578543787158 0.077325440228 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600534055754 0.547984918172 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.176667099095 0.149214159877 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.266599296273 0.161403998019 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841379958994 0.0892212321368 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.490226530031 0.385218514788 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.145879333366 0.0692045440612 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.415757265808 0.275328986314 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620575254523 0.0653680567796 95% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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