Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

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Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

In the last years there is a consternation about the extinction of different species of plants and animals. Those species are involved in an unfair competition against human activities by changing the natural habitat in several ways. If human beings take the responsibility to get involved in the natural habitat they also have to take responsibility to save endangered species from potential extinction.

If people take the responsibility to huge change to landscapes they also have to recover it if necessary for wild animal living and the existance of different species of plants. For example, all over the world there is a huge felling of trees to sell tropical wood or create space for agriculture. So the living area for monkeys is increased which lead to a decreased amount of monkeys which make them a protected specie.

Secondly, we do not have to undervalue the results of extinction of a single specie. All plants and animals are related to each other in one big web. Even the extinction of little insects could cause big problems for many other plants and animals which are not directly linked to this particular little insect.So a little change in the diversity of species in a particular area could lead to a big disaster for many species in a very wide area.

Outside problems for plants and animals extinction of species can lead to serious problems for our own specie; human beings. If we treat our landscapes as we do and if we put this much rubbish in oceans fruitful landscapes will change in the dessert where we could not cultivate food. Oceans will become so polluted that eatable fish will extinct or become that polluted that it is not eatable anymore. By extinction of this animals and changing landscapes, we are not able anymore to produce the amount of food to feed the entire world population.

To conclude, we feel the need to control a lot of biological processes so we have to take responsibility if there exists major problems in numbers of plants and animals. It is necessary that we do not undermine the results of extinction and treat our animals and plants by giving power to mother nature.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng the natural habitat in several ways. If human beings take the responsibility to...
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Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...linked to this particular little insect.So a little change in the diversity of spe...
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Line 7, column 421, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...s not eatable anymore. By extinction of this animals and changing landscapes, we are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85519125683 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74072044692 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445355191257 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9871443492 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.466666667 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86666666667 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191788989092 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707362198222 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561908757782 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115761991181 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621328637062 0.0667264976115 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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