Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Some people advocate for the necessity of government funding of arts in ensuring its prosperity and availability to all people. While some other people argue that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts. Both of view are reasonable in a way. Mine is more closely align with the former one.
It is surely necessary for the government to fund arts. The government funding of arts is a part of government budgets used to stimulate the development of the field of art, just like the government funding of economic stimuli and political strategies. The purpose is to boost the advancement in the area. Especially for arts, the financial help of government is necessary. Different with economics and politics, arts seem not to be a life-or-death issue. So people tend to disparage it’s benefits and necessity and therefore tend not to invest or participate at cost, which makes it particularly vital for governments to boost the development of arts. Besides, due to government funding, many art museums and fairs are free to public. This makes it possible for all people to have access to art words and participate in cultural events. Subsequently, people, in general, will become more appreciate of arts and thereby more likely contribute to the prosperity of arts. Hence government funding of arts is necessary to ensure the thrive of arts and availability to all people.
On the other hand, government funding could threaten the integrity of arts, but not necessary. All funds are driven by certain purposes. According to National Assembly of State Arts Agencies, private funds are very often driven by personal goals and therefore more biased. In contrast, government funding tends to serve the interest of the public. Government funding is distributed based on the cultural needs and assets of local people. In other words, the government could just provide people the artworks they want without imposing any political or any other kind of thoughts. At the same time, the government funding could threaten the integrity of arts by imposing certain purposes, good or bad. For example, Nanjing Massacre Memorial Hall is funded by the Chinese government for people to remember the history when about three hundred thousand people were killed by the Japanese army in 1937. Whether people want it or not, the government decided people should be reminded of it and therefore funded it. The funding is provided by the government, artworks more or less will be restrained by the policies and standards. Thus, government funding may harm the integrity of arts; yet, not all arts are imposed with governments’ agenda.
In conclusion, align with my point of view, government funding of arts is necessary to help arts flourish and for all people to have access. On the other hand, it may threaten the integrity of some, not all, arts.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: So people tend to disparage it's benefits and necessity and therefore tend not to invest or participate at cost, which makes it particularly vital for governments to boost the development of arts.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to it's and benefits
flaws:
Better to support or against one side. but when you argue one side, need to take consideration of another side.
read the requirements:
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2321 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.938 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.407 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.908 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.452 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sperity and availability to all people. While some other people argue that government...
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Line 3, column 976, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...y contribute to the prosperity of arts. Hence government funding of arts is necessary...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1032, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... funding of arts is necessary to ensure the thrive of arts and availability to all people....
^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'in general', 'kind of', 'in other words', 'more or less', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.282485875706 0.240241500013 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.133709981168 0.157235817809 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.075329566855 0.0880659088768 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0489642184557 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0207156308851 0.0444667217837 47% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122410546139 0.12292977631 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0263653483992 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80775618493 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0376647834275 0.030933414821 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.101694915254 0.0997080785238 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015065913371 0.0249443105267 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00376647834275 0.0148568991511 25% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2868.0 2732.02544248 105% => OK
No of words: 470.0 452.878318584 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10212765957 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363829787234 0.366273622748 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.306382978723 0.280924506359 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221276595745 0.200843997647 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155319148936 0.132149295362 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80775618493 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 219.290929204 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446808510638 0.48968727796 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.003035811 55.4138127331 90% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6194690265 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.4074074074 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4236371047 59.4972553346 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.222222222 141.124799967 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4074074074 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.62962962963 0.674092028746 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 48.0457052797 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 2.12037037037 1.64882698954 129% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.713124446837 0.391690518653 182% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130451122721 0.123202303941 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0814219864118 0.077325440228 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.516857211896 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154115014124 0.149214159877 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.299315247459 0.161403998019 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156153456453 0.0892212321368 175% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.58083351717 0.385218514788 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.04488929701 0.0692045440612 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.585671365637 0.275328986314 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04756308392 0.0653680567796 73% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 7.22455752212 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.5995575221 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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