Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
The statement depicts the dilemma of author toward the necessity of government funding with the development in arts field. The author agrees with the idea to fund the arts but afraid the fund could possibly damage the integrity of the arts. Arts as a form of human spirit plays an important role in society. Artists usually express their feeling or subconscious in the form of art, and invokes resonances of audiences helping them to understand their own feeling or palliate their emotions suffering. The creation of arts come from the very honest feeling of the artists. Therefore, through government funding, the living condition of the artists altered, and thus the arts pieces no longer reflect the real feeling of the artists at the moment.
However, from the previous sentence, by that I don’t mean we shouldn’t fund the arts industry, but I do mean not to fund the artists, which I will address on next passage. It is necessary for a government to fund in arts facilities. In this way, not only can cultures of a country be preserved but also art pieces are more available to the mass population through governmental funding, and thus thrive the arts industry as a whole. For example, the museum of Louvre, Paris, owns myriads of the arts collections and attracts people from all over the world. With such prosperity, the museum is able to sustain its own as well as pushes their arts industry further beyond.
Nevertheless, funding the artist is not as efficacious as funding the art facilities. By giving the artists supports, it is possible to change the living condition of the artists. But it is only a short term strategy because it is insalubrious for economy and the artists would possibly too rely on the fund. More over, the fund may also influences the mindset of the artists and usually touching art pieces requires the artists themselves to face certain kind of quagmire and depict the struggle deep in their mind. Take Chinese poet for example, one of the considered best calligraphy was created by Su Shi, Song dynasty, during which, he got frame by his political opponents, and the king decided to ostracize him, which resulted in his huge lugubriousness, and thus engendered his masterpiece of tear.
In conclusion, it is necessary to fund the arts industry, especially arts facilities, but not the artists. Because funding the artists is generally not as effective as funding a museum which is more functional and accessible for the public. Further more, the supports from the government might threaten the integrity of the artists and that is noisome for them from long term perspective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...ea to fund the arts but afraid the fund could possibly damage the integrity of the arts. Arts ...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...'t mean we shouldn't fund the arts industry, but I do mean not to fund the...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'culture'
Suggestion: culture
...s facilities. In this way, not only can cultures of a country be preserved but also art ...
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Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...vernmental funding, and thus thrive the arts industry as a whole. For example, the m...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to rely'?
Suggestion: to rely
... economy and the artists would possibly too rely on the fund. More over, the fund may al...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...conclusion, it is necessary to fund the arts industry, especially arts facilities, b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97052154195 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76009085198 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49433106576 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3508498831 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.368421053 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359507000655 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13772578387 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102040697629 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241372236989 0.150359130593 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759060188248 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.