Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.in return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

Author recommends that young people are inspired by celebrities, and hence they have a a moral obligation to behave as role models and should participate in events that shape the society. Movie starts and sports personalities are representatives of their provinces and society at large. I strongly agree with the authors point of view and put forth the following points to bolster my point of view.

How you sow, so you shall reap. So goes the famous argot. Minds of youngsters are at a moulding stage in their teens. They look up to their favorite celebrities and draw inspiration from them. In a way, they inculcate habits of the celebrities they look up to. A bad behaviour might be overlooked at a personal level, but these small behaviour traits spiral out and get magnified when followers misconstrue their idols bad behaviour. Hence, celebrities must behave responsibly because they is being watched my millions of his followers.

Secondly, every small action of a celebrity is followed religiously by his followers. For example, a sports personality behaving aggressively on field during the sporting event inspires a lot of his followers to do the same. Hence, he has the moral obligation to display the sporting spirit when the game concludes and celebrate the spirit of the game. That way, fandoms can relate better to their idols and learn that its the sport that triumphs at the end.

Finally, celebrities in movies must try and pick up meaningful scripts that has a positive impact on the society. Kids and adults look up to their reel life heroes. Apart from their silver screen impact, the celebrities must come forward and indulge themselves in volunteer activities. They must visit fund raisers and greet their fans curteously. Celebrities must try and invest themselves in bring up the society that has given them the status they are in today. There are various ways in which they can pay back to the society at large. To name a few, they can provide free classes to underprigileged children, they can spot the talent in youngsters and sponsor their training at competitive levels. They needn't just be invested in their fields, they can go out in general and dedicate some time of their busy schedules for their fans.

However, the celebrities have their personal lives too. People must respect that and not judge them on their personal lives. We as a society and adults also must use our own thinking to differentiate between the right and the wrong. Blind following will only lead to our downfall. To conclude, I believe all celebrities must behave on their best when they are being viewed and revered by millions of fans. They must also invest themselves to help and upbring the society that has given them so much.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: a
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: a; a
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'apart from', 'for example', 'in general']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.226377952756 0.240241500013 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.165354330709 0.157235817809 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0610236220472 0.0880659088768 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0452755905512 0.0497285424764 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0984251968504 0.0444667217837 221% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0944881889764 0.12292977631 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0314960629921 0.0406280797675 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66870919535 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0295275590551 0.030933414821 95% => OK
Particles: 0.00984251968504 0.0016655270985 591% => OK
Determiners: 0.0826771653543 0.0997080785238 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0354330708661 0.0249443105267 142% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0196850393701 0.0148568991511 132% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2745.0 2732.02544248 100% => OK
No of words: 464.0 452.878318584 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91594827586 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.32974137931 0.366273622748 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23275862069 0.280924506359 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.17025862069 0.200843997647 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116379310345 0.132149295362 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66870919535 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 219.290929204 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523706896552 0.48968727796 107% => OK
Word variations: 61.3007618381 55.4138127331 111% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5714285714 23.380412469 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5076838264 59.4972553346 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0357142857 141.124799967 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 23.380412469 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.464285714286 0.674092028746 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 39.8472906404 51.4728631049 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.14012738854 1.64882698954 69% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407997679781 0.391690518653 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109767524845 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0849837148919 0.077325440228 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.45574605739 0.547984918172 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132992913709 0.149214159877 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13460947656 0.161403998019 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796956545497 0.0892212321368 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.30035056797 0.385218514788 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0835579626908 0.0692045440612 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273414063933 0.275328986314 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408676806453 0.0653680567796 63% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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