sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

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sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

While growing up, I remember looking up to various super stars in movies, tv shows, and magazines, but never understood why I wasn't allowed to view certain programs. I now know that it was because the characters or celebrities that starred in those shows were not good role models. In many instances, I remember watching some of my favorite childhood stars like Lindsey Lohan, fall out of stardom and find themselves in a place no one thought they would ever be.

I believe that celebrities have a societal responsibility to act as role models for the youth of our country. Although parents typically act as the main role model in a childs life, there is no shielding them from the hundreds of entertainment outlets and social media websites that can impact the development of a child and what they percieve as normal behavior. Children are very impressionable and learn at astounding rates. If what they hear and see is not properly moderated, you never know what or who is putting ideas and beliefs into a child's mind.

In addition to this, everyone has heard the saying that it takes a village to raise a child. When there is unlimited access to all corners of the world though magazines on drug store shelves, or computers in the local library, society as a whole is the village and we must work together in raising the next generation.

This argument could be refuted by saying that parents are the only people who can influence the outcome of a child. Although I believe this is an incorrect statement, I can see how many people might believe this to be true. Parents and other caregivers are around the most and therefore have the greatest impact on a child's development, morals, and view of the world.

Another argument could be that celebrities are their own person and have no obligation to look out for other people's children. We can all agree that starring in a movie and becoming famous does not have, "being a good role model" in the job description. They, just as everyone else, have free will over their decisions and life path.

Although there are two sides to this issue, it is safe to say that celebrities and the media as a whole have a strong impact on the development of the upcoming generations. Whether these super stars feel it is their responsibility to be a role model or not, they must understand the relationship between their behavior and the growth of children around the world.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...d magazines, but never understood why I wasnt allowed to view certain programs. I now...
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Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'viewing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: viewing
...ut never understood why I wasnt allowed to view certain programs. I now know that it wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, therefore, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75650118203 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69103846941 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543735224586 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3146805349 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.352941176 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82352941176 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252392236885 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718844040374 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470289065014 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115619394807 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538734366773 0.0667264976115 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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