Teachers' salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing an

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Teachers' salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

This topic raises a very controversial issue of whether, the salaries of the teachers should be based on the academic performance or not. Indisputably, there must be a method to instigate the teachers to perform better or give out their best but, the dependence of their salaries on the students scoring is not feasible. Thus, I would disagree with the contention of the author that teachers' salaries should be dependent on the academic performances of their students and would argue that salaries of the teachers' should not be dependent on the performance of their students.
Firstly, there might be many students who are trying really hard but, they could not get good scores. Also, it might be possible that some students might not score well in their exams due to some other reasons and the salary of the teachers' is to be at the loss. To illustrate this, let us take an example where the teacher taught well in the class and the student was also bright. But, due the reason that he had to attend the funeral of his relative just the day before the exams he could not perform well because of the grief. In such a case there is no mistake of the teacher, though the salary of the teacher is to suffer.
Secondly, it is also possible that some students might deserve less scores. But, in order to increase their salaries the teacher provides them with the good marks. Thus, it will be unjust to the students working hard for their scores. Also,this would make students careless as they would know that the salary of the teacher depends on their grades. Therefore, they would take their studies lightly and not follow their teacher accordingly. Hence, this would hinder the progress of the society and will not help in the overall growth of the children.
Admittedly, there are some changes that should be made in order to provide motivation to the teachers about the teaching field. In order that, they would try to give their best into this field. Yet, dependence of their salaries on the grades of the students is not one of them. Because of such an implication, the teachers will reamin in the fear all the time about their social and economic security and evidently this would not yield good for the students. So, there are other ways which should be implemented and this step should not be taken.
To sum up, the contention of the author is indefensible that the salaries of the teachers' should depend on the academic performances of their students. It is contrary to the overwhelming evidence that the salaries should be independent of the grades of the students. Thus, as long as some measurements are performed, or some areas are invovled the conclusion that the salaries of the teachers' should be independent of the performances of the students holds credit.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun scores is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ssible that some students might deserve less scores. But, in order to increase their...
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Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...ents working hard for their scores. Also,this would make students careless as they wo...
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Line 4, column 286, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the students is not one of them. Because of such an implication, the teachers wil...
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.189393939394 0.240241500013 79% => OK
Verbs: 0.136363636364 0.157235817809 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0625 0.0880659088768 71% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0681818181818 0.0497285424764 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0549242424242 0.0444667217837 124% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126893939394 0.12292977631 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0208333333333 0.0406280797675 51% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52968339257 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0265151515152 0.030933414821 86% => OK
Particles: 0.00378787878788 0.0016655270985 227% => OK
Determiners: 0.142045454545 0.0997080785238 142% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0511363636364 0.0249443105267 205% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00757575757576 0.0148568991511 51% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2775.0 2732.02544248 102% => OK
No of words: 481.0 452.878318584 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76923076923 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320166320166 0.366273622748 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239085239085 0.280924506359 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174636174636 0.200843997647 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0769230769231 0.132149295362 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52968339257 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 219.290929204 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.399168399168 0.48968727796 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.5480795899 55.4138127331 80% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8636363636 23.380412469 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6936782314 59.4972553346 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.136363636 141.124799967 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8636363636 23.380412469 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.636363636364 0.674092028746 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 45.7721602722 51.4728631049 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.29927007299 1.64882698954 79% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.503627420751 0.391690518653 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.160587845428 0.123202303941 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.114528014682 0.077325440228 148% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.599444635032 0.547984918172 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.19561704402 0.149214159877 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.241101652946 0.161403998019 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112218787065 0.0892212321368 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.562993955358 0.385218514788 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0223418392595 0.0692045440612 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.395527489507 0.275328986314 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428518701543 0.0653680567796 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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