Average age at marriage in England and Wales
The line graph shows the average age of people in UK and Wales married, over a 40 year period, from 1961 to 2000.
In general, the trend showed the average age of married both females and males was upwards from 1961 to 2000.
In 1971, the average age of males stood a little bit above 25 years old. A next decade, it fell slightly below 25 years old. It was the highest decrease for all period. From 1971 to 1991, it raised sharply from below 25 years old to over 30 years old. In the end of the period, it climbed again to above 40 years old. In the other hand, the average ages of females married stood at below 25 years old in 1971. In 1971, it fell down minimally; however, it recovered in 1981. In the next two decades, from 1981 to 2000, it raised climbed even higher from below 25 years old to above 25 years old.
Interestingly there was similar degree of change between males and females in years of age to married. In the second period, both of it decreased and went up again in the next decades. The rise trend continued until the ends of the period.
Overall, it can be conclude that the average age of married in UK and Wales showed increased from 1961 to 1971. The trend illustrates that the females married in younger age than these males, over the all period.
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In general, the trend showed the average age of married both females and males was upwards from 1961 to 2000.
In general, the trend which showed the average age of married both females and males was upwards from 1961 to 2000.
Sentence: In the next two decades, from 1981 to 2000, it raised climbed even higher from below 25 years old to above 25 years old.
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Suggestion: Refer to raised and climbed
Sentence: The trend illustrates that the females married in younger age than these males, over the all period.
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Suggestion: Refer to the and all
flaws:
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.669 7.5
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Don't need two paragraphs for conclusion (the second and fifth paragraph)
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: body 1
para 3: body 2
para 4: conclusion
or
para 1: introduction
para 2: conclusion
para 3: body 1
para 4: body 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 10
No. of Words: 241 200
No. of Characters: 1000 1000
No. of Different Words: 97 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.94 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.149 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.988 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 10 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 7 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.669 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.2 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.404 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4