The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart show information about the number of bee colonies in US and how much honey they produced from 1970 to 2010.

The number of bee colonies in1970 stood at 4 millions and that was increased to 4.2 millions in 1980. Every ten years the number of bee colonies became fell down over 1 millions from 1980 to 2010, there were 1.8 millions colonies left.

During the same period, the honey production stood at 130.000 tonnes in 1970. That was went down to 110.000 tonnes and rose up again to 120.000 tonnes in 1990. Since 1990, the honey production became decreased every ten years, until 2010. There ere 70.000 tonnes in 2010.

Overall, the number of bee colonies in US influence how much honey produced which bees make have fallen during the 40 years period. There have relation between bees and honey, there were more bee, there were more honey but in 1990 produce of honey increasing because the environment support bees.

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Sentence: Every ten years the number of bee colonies became fell down over 1 millions from 1980 to 2010, there were 1.8 millions colonies left.
Description: A verb, past tense is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to became and fell

Sentence: That was went down to 110.000 tonnes and rose up again to 120.000 tonnes in 1990.
Description: The token was is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to was and went

Sentence: Since 1990, the honey production became decreased every ten years, until 2010.
Description: A verb, past tense is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to became and decreased

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