The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This report contains explanations of a graph illustrating the rate of heart attack occurring in USA annually by regarding age group and gender.

Men are at the most risk of experiencing the heart attack, even when they are in relatively young age. Every year, there are about 123 thousand male Americans in the group of age 29-44 experience heart attack. The ill’s rate rises significantly on the group of men whose age between 45 and 64 by 424 thousand cases. However, most heart attack occur on males beyond 65 years old by the number of 440 thousand.

On the other hand, women are at less risk compared to men, especially those who are still young. There is no heart attack experienced by females around 29-44 years old. Nevertheless, the heart attack starts to attack women of the next age group by 136 thousand cases. Unfortunately, there are 374 thousand women whose ages more than 65 experiencing heart attack.

To conclude, young men are more at risk of experiencing heart attack than young women. However, the rate of heart attacks happening on women increase within the two other age groups.

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