The chart shows below the result of a survey the adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.
The chart shows some reasons why adult decide to study. To crave certain knowledge in educational institution is among other several reasons that adult mostly want to gain from university, it is showed in the chart by “interest in subject 40%”. To gain qualification in certain field of subject, the percentage of 38 took second place why adult decide to study.
People or adult specifically aware of the importance of their current job, so to support their current job/helpful for current job (22%), they decide to study to a higher level to gain knowledge for well-paid profession. To improve prospects of promotion and enjoy learning/ studying reached the same percentage of 20% while to be able to change jobs reached the percentage of 12 in why adult decide to further their education. By studying, adult are supposed to meet different people with different background thus it helps them able to communicate well and build a good relationship with others.
The pie chart shows how the cost of education should be shared. From the total of 100% of the cost, 40% of the cost should be paid individually, 35% should be paid from employer and the remain cost of the course 25% should be paid by taxpayer.
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Sentence: The chart shows some reasons why adult decide to study.
Description: The fragment adult decide to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace decide with verb, past tense
Sentence: To crave certain knowledge in educational institution is among other several reasons that adult mostly want to gain from university, it is showed in the chart by interest in subject 40.
Description: The word showed is not usually used as a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to showed
Sentence: To gain qualification in certain field of subject, the percentage of 38 took second place why adult decide to study.
Description: The fragment adult decide to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace decide with verb, past tense
Sentence: To improve prospects of promotion and enjoy learning/ studying reached the same percentage of 20 while to be able to change jobs reached the percentage of 12 in why adult decide to further their education.
Description: The fragment adult decide to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace decide with verb, past tense
Description: The word further is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to further
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: body 1
para 3: body 2
para 4: conclusion
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 207 200
No. of Characters: 970 1000
No. of Different Words: 112 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.793 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.686 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.622 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 65 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.441 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.681 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4