Computer games are supported by some families becouse of their advantages. While other parents are against them.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Computer games are supported by some families becouse of their advantages. While other parents are against them.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Submitted by gehan on Wed, 07/10/2013 - 07:17

Modern technology nowadays has got a wide spread all over the world. Video and computer games are found at a huge number of homes. However, some people find this phenomena as a merit , but others are against this idea. I will try to debate this issue in this essay and provide the two points of views.

The Proponents of computer games argue that they have a lot of advantages , which their children can gain . for example, the child who plays such games, can learn how to deal with computer perfectly. Also, this child would gain a great experience of internet and research skills as he or she try to find an interesting game. Moreover, computer has become an essential piece of equipment for both student and employee. Therefore, using these modern games may benefit students for their future career.

Opponents of computer games argue that these games have a lot of cons. In the first place , parents find these games waste their children’s time; and get them the time to do their school works. Also, they think their kids receive a massive amount of violence through these game, and this makes them more aggressive . thus, they believe that computer games have a negative effect on their children.

In conclusion , computer games have pros and cons as well. I think, if parents supervised their children and give them a limit time for playing , these games would be a great technological gadget to build the children skills for their future jobs.

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Sentence: However, some people find this phenomena as a merit , but others are against this idea.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and phenomena

Sentence: Also, this child would gain a great experience of internet and research skills as he or she try to find an interesting game.
Description: The fragment she try to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace try with verb, past tense

flaws:
No. of Words: 249 350
No. of Characters: 1161 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 249 350
No. of Characters: 1161 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.972 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.663 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.256 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 66 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 48 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.429 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

Hi i am Gehan
thank you for this analysis.
i really appreciate it.
however, i get IELTS before and i get 5.5 over all.
Now, i need 6.5 over all for immigration . and i don't know what should i do ? i am so frustrated.
could you give me a piece of advice if you knew i have 2 months to get the Exam?

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