The diagram below give information about the ages in the population in France and German in 1995 and projection for 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below give information about the ages in the population in France and German in 1995 and projection for 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams show statistic information regarding the ages of the habitants of France and German in 1995 and also a estimative for 2030.

We can see that in 1995 the majority of people in France was between 0 and 10 years old, whith 50,1%, whereas in German most of the population was between 55 years old (61,6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3,6% of people in the former country was 56 years old or more in 1995, while the latter country this figure is represented with 24,1%.

The projections for 2030 show that the number of people with 11-54 years and 55 years or more will increase in France, reaching 57,3% and 5,7% respectively. In contrast, in German, the population with 11-54 years will decrease to 46,2%, while people with 60 years or more will grow to 42,3%.

Overall, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend on the rates of people with 60 years or more in both countries.

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Sentence: The diagrams show statistic information regarding the ages of the habitants of France and German in 1995 and also a estimative for 2030.
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Sentence: We can see that in 1995 the majority of people in France was between 0 and 10 years old, whith 50,1, whereas in German most of the population was between 55 years old 61,6, in the same year.
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