The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pictures below gives information about the changing of site a school in 2004 to in 2024. That is predicting about the site of school.

In general, a school has building for classrooms, sports field, main entrance, parking area, walking path around the garden.

The first picture shows the site of a school in 2004 which only had two buildings. They were separated by a road path between them. In 2004, this school only had 600 students and the school had area form an oval shape with a large sports field on its right.

The second picture shows the plan to develop the school site which has started until 2024. In 2024, it has been predicted that this school will able to hold up to 1000 students. Because of that, they needed a new building. The sports field will be reformed into a new building. The design described that there will be a new corridor connecting the old two building and the back of the new building, they will build a new parking area. A new sports field will be rebuild on the rest of unused area near the new building and the old parking area which connected to main entrance.

In conclusion, the school need to improve their assets to reach their goal in 2024.

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