The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meterology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where

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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meterology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The below diagram illustrates how Australian Bureau of Meterology collects the weather information up-to-the-minute using with different information equipments.

First, the information is coming from the satellite. It gives one satellite photo. And using with this photo the Bureau of Meteorology is collecting some information for giving analysis and forecasting. After that the satellite is giving signals to radar. This radar is connect with the satellite. Later the radar is filtering the information using radar screen. Next radar is associate with drifting buoy it gives the synoptic chart. This chart is useful to calculate the weather.

After completed this total process who are telecast this information they are preparing to broadcast this information. Using with different broadcast equipment like TV,Radio etc. Using with news reader the TV and Radio are telecasting this information. The different between TV and Radio is that people can watch the news reader in TV and watch what is weather conditions. But in Radio it is only listening purpose people cann't watch it. Another equipment is telephone. People can know the information by telephone. It gives the recorded announcement.

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Sentence: Later the radar is filters the information using with radar screen.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to is and filters

Sentence: The different between TV and Radio is people can watch the news reader in TV and watch what is weather conditions.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to is and people

Sentence: People can knows the information using with telephone.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to can and knows

Sentence: The below diagram illustrates how Australian Bureau of Meterology collects the weather inforamation up-to-the-minute using with different infromation equipments.
Error: infromation Suggestion: information
Error: inforamation Suggestion: information

entence: Next radar is associate with drifting buoy it gives the synoptic chart.
Error: synoptic Suggestion: synaptic

Sentence: This chart is useful to calulate the weather.
Error: calulate Suggestion: calculate

Sentence: Using with different broadcast equipments like TV,Radio etc. Using with news reader the TV and Radio are telecasting this information.
Error: equipments Suggestion: equipment

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 187 350
No. of Characters: 1000 1500
No. of Different Words: 96 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.698 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.348 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.795 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 68 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.688 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.763 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.125 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.474 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4

Sentence: Later the radar is filters the information using with radar screen.
Suggestion: Later the radar is filtering the information using radar screen.

Sentence: The different between TV and Radio is people can watch the news reader in TV and watch what is weather conditions.
Suggestion: The different between TV and Radio is that people can watch the news reader in TV and watch what is weather conditions.

Sentence: People can knows the information using with telephone.
Suggestion: People can know the information by telephone.

Think about why did those changes.