The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process. Summarise the informatioan by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.
These diagrams describe the process of making chocolate and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up. There are several processes to make chocolate. The first step is grinding cocoa until become liquor and discard its waste. After that, we can make cocoa liquor become chocolate bar or become food ingredients such as cocoa butter and cocoa powder. Chocolate bar is produced by adding some sugar, cocoa butter, cocoa powder, and other ingredients. Meanwhile, the other alternative is by pressing cocoa liquor in to cocoa butter and cocoa powder as ingredient food product.
Next, the diagram shows how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up. The pie chart indicates that chocolate farmer receives only 4% of chocolate price. Moreover, chocolate company and tax receieve each 10% and 15% of chocolate price. On the other hand, cost of ingredients and overheads take a highest proportion of chocolate price which is 37% and follow by supermarket which receive 34% of chocolate price.
In conclusion, the processes of making chocolate affect share of chocolate price . it takes the largest proportion of chocolate price. Conversely, chocolate farmer are the one who get the smallest proportion of chocolate price.
Sentence: On the other hand, cost of ingredients and overheads take a highest proportion of chocolate price which is 37 and follow by supermarket which receive 34 of chocolate price.
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chocolate farmer are the one who get the smallest proportion
chocolate farmers are the ones who get the smallest proportion
Sentence: Moreover, chocolate company and tax receieve each 10 and 15 of chocolate price.
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