The diagrams below show how the sites of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show how the sites of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pictures illustrate a map planning of a school. Based on the picture we can compare of construction this school between the site of a school in 1004 and 2024. A number of students are a main case to change school site.

In 2004, the position of school building one was across of school building two. The school had one car park in beside main road and in front of car park was main entrance. Most of area in this school was a park which many trees there. It was because in 2004 a number of students in Cambridge School about 600 students. Long time ago, most of students went to school by foot or by bicycle, so school does not needs large area as parking area.

According to a forecasting of management school, it gets a result that in 2024 school has more than 1000 students. Because of that, school needs new school building to shelter all students. Management decides to reconstruction the site of a school. There are three schools building and has two car parks, because in 2024 most of students tend to use vehicles.

In conclusion, a number of students influence requirement of school building. Because of that management finds a solution to build facilities for students. However, more facilities it means that green land of school decrease.

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Sentence: A number of students are a main case to change school site.
Description: The fragment a main case is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is

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