The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pictures show the silkworm’s life cycle and the production of silk cloth. It is show how the cloth. It is show how the cloth is made from the silkworm and what part of silkworm which is used to produce cloth.

In the first picture, it could be seen that the moth produce eggs. Within 10 days, the eggs grow become silkworm larva that eat mulberry leaves to fulfill its need of foods. This larva would produce silk thread which is surrounding its body in 4-6 weeks. The thread of silk around the larva’s body would be shaped full it is called cocoon in the following days.

The cocoon would be used as the material for producing silk cloth, like the second picture shows. The cocoon would be selected by its quality before it is boiled in the water to clean it. After that, the thread would be unwound and it would be stretched to show the original length of the thread, approximately 300-900 meters. Then it is twisted to make the thread stronger, before it is dyed in a liquid. It is also could be woven first before dying in the liquid.

In conclusion, it could be seen how the silk cloth is produced from the silkworm.

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Sentence: It is show how the cloth.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and show

Sentence: It is show how the cloth is made from the silkworm and what part of silkworm which is used to produce cloth.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and show

Sentence: It is also could be woven first before dying in the liquid.
Description: The fragment is also could is rare

the moth produce eggs.
the moth produces eggs.

the eggs grow become silkworm larva
the eggs grow and become silkworm larva

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Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 10
No. of Words: 208 200
No. of Characters: 895 1000
No. of Different Words: 96 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.798 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.303 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.121 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 53 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 30 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 19 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.42 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4