the diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004

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the diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004

The diagrams give information about school site in 2004 and the project to renovate school site in 2024. It can clearly be seen that the second diagram shows some changes of the school area, such as school building, road, parking area, and sport field.

In 2024, the number of student stood at 600 students. The diagram shows how the school area at that year. The position of building is only a small area. It can be compared to the vines park where located behind second building which larger than the school building area. As a consequence, school management goes to add up the number of student with making project of school site renovation.

The project of change is to extend some schools area of the building. First of all, the school management will make a new road with taking the fraction from vines land. The aim of making a new road is to link the main entrance to the second car park. The second car park will be built behind the school building three. Next, if the plan of student’s number is approximately 1.000 student, it certainly need a new school building where have been planned to build in sport field. Then, the sport field will be shifted in front of road and beside the vines park. Last, the path also should be renovated to connect the three school buildings.

In short, the project figure in 2024 is different from the figure in 2004, even though, there will a lot of school side area still same.

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