A different range of technology available increase the gap between the rich and poor people. Do you agree and disagree?
Nowadays, technologies are like fashions for many people that change their gadgets every time when the new one release. Frequent people think that they need to always renew their technologies. However, some of people believe that they do not need to always follow development of technologies. In this article I will give you the reasons why people think technology can make gap between rich and poor people.
Today, every one just think to always follow the development of technologies like gadget that always show the costumers their newest developments of gadget. Because of that there are many negative thinking from other people who always change their technologies just want to show up their wealth to other people. That is one of the reasons why frequent people believe technologies increase the gap between the rich and poor people because there are many unlucky people who cannot effort to buy a new technology.
Some of people do not think the same with the latest opinion that say range of technology can improve the gap between people in the world. It is just about pride that cannot be accepted to many people. They just cannot believe because they cannot effort to have a modern technology like other people after that they make an opinion and than they say if technology is a problem that makes an increase the distance between rich and poor people.
In conclusion, I think technologies will not make any problem between the rich and poor people because it is just about pride.
Sentence: That is one of the reasons why frequent people believe technologies increase the gap between the rich and poor people because there are many unlucky people who cannot effort to buy a new technology.
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Sentence: They just cannot believe because they cannot effort to have a modern technology like other people after that they make an opinion and than they say if technology is a problem that makes an increase the distance between rich and poor people.
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Suggestion: Refer to cannot and effort
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