Do agree or disagree with following statement television has distroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reason to support you opinion.
Watching television is one of way to refreshing brain. Numerous viewers do not watch television because they afraid to destroy their communication with their friends and their family. However, some people still do it.
In front of television to much could influence to relationship with friends and family. Several viewers get this condition.When the FIFA World Cup 2010, young until adult people stay up for watching this program. They think that this program only once for four years, too suffer if do not watch one event. Stay up until morning would sleep until afternoon. Family and friends would think that viewer intentional to do not want to keep their relationship with viewers, viewers sleep and could not to disturb them.
On the other hand, spectator think that watch television could not destroy their relationship. Watch television only way to refresh brain and they could stay in their home and still communication with their relatives. Moreover, time management for them is essential. Actually from this media could make relationship better than before,for case, spectator could invite their family and friends to watching movies and they could continue this subject to talk about movies after they watch.
In conclusion, television could give negative effect for relationship. However television could become subject to tighten relationship. Viewers should understand to make balance between their activity and relationship.
Sentence: Watching television is one of way to refreshing brain.
Suggestion: one of the ways
Sentence: Numerous viewers do not watch television because they afraid to destroy their communication with their friends and their family.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to they and afraid
Sentence: In front of television to much could influence to relationship with friends and family.
Suggestion: Staying in front of television to much could influence to relationship with friends and family.
Sentence: They think that this program only once for four years, too suffer if do not watch one event.
Suggestion: They think that this program is only once for four years, too suffering if they do not watch the event.
Sentence: Family and friends would think that viewer intentional to do not want to keep their relationship with viewers, viewers sleep and could not to disturb them.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to viewer and intentional
Sentence: On the other hand, spectator think that watch television could not destroy their relationship.
Description: The fragment spectator think that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace think with verb, past tense
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