The figure shows the percentages of employees in each occupation absent from work for at least one day in a reference week in 2001 due to injury or illness. Write a report for a university lecturer conveying the information in the graph.

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The figure shows the percentages of employees in each occupation absent from work for at least one day in a reference week in 2001 due to injury or illness. Write a report for a university lecturer conveying the information in the graph.

The bar chart illustrates the date that because of injure or illness, the absent rates of employees are difference among different occupations for at least one day in a given week in 2001.

As we can see from the graph, the occupations are arranged by the percentage of employees absence, from the highest proportion to the bottom level. Specifically, personal and protective have the largest number of people absent from woek, about 6 per 100 staffs, then followed by plant and machine operatives, clerical and secretarial, and they were 5.9% and 5.8% respectively. The last one over 5% is other occupations whose absent rate was 5.1 percent. Then there are four positions' rate are between 4% and 5%, they were selling(4.8%), associated professinal and technical(4.6%), craft and related occupations (4.4%), professional occupations (4%). While, managers and administrators with the lowest staffs absent rate about 3.25%, bacome the super one.

Finally, the average percent of employees absence is 4.9%, which is less than 5 in 100.

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Sentence: Specifically, personal and protective have the largest number of people absent from woek, about 6 per 100 staffs, then followed by plant and machine operatives, clerical and secretarial, and they were 5.9 and 5.8 respectively.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or
Suggestion: Refer to protective and have

Sentence: the absent rates of employees are difference among different occupations for at least one day in a given week in 2001.

"are difference" should be "are different"

Sentence: The bar chart illustrates the date that because of injure or illness, the absent rates of employees are difference among different occupations for at least one day in a given week in 2001.
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Sentence: As we can see from the graph, the occupations are arranged by the percentage of employees absence, from the highest proportion to the bottom level.
No spelling errors
Sentence: Specifically, personal and protective have the largest number of people absent from woek, about 6 per 100 staffs, then followed by plant and machine operatives, clerical and secretarial, and they were 5.9 and 5.8 respectively.
Error: woek Suggestion: work
Sentence: The last one over 5 is other occupations whose absent rate was 5.1 percent.
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Sentence: Then there are four positions' rate are between 4 and 5, they were selling4.8, associated professinal and technical4.6, craft and related occupations 4.4, professional occupations 4.
Error: selling4 Suggestion: selling
Error: technical4 Suggestion: technical
Error: professinal Suggestion: professional
Sentence: While, managers and administrators with the lowest staffs absent rate about 3.25, bacome the super one.
Error: bacome Suggestion: become
Sentence: Finally, the average percent of employees absence is 4.9, which is less than 5 in 100.
No spelling errors