How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons
and specific examples to support your answer.
Movies and television are entertaiment for human. Certainly they can give an effect because everyone needs relaxation wherefore numerous activities. Film and television are cheap recreation than other refuge inasmuch as each person mostly has tube in their house. Flickers and televison have many ways to make people for changing habit such us give an inspiration, take experience of great people as subject from she/he real life and lifestyle.
First of all, give an inspiration to people is one of methods to change human habit. At the movies or tube there are numerous of ways how to make good programs, but just a litle trick how to move atittude from bad to be good. In this case, give inspiration is very works because film can give illustration about process. So, human can immitate and pay attention how was progress is running. For instance, these days, people are adoring with Mario Teguh. He is great motivator from my country, Indonesia. He usually give powerful words who can improve human’s side. As a result, many stations of television is wanting him to fill one of script so that make interest people who watch. So, from that I can conclude that inspiration through example in film or programs in televion are useful to adjustment social routine.
Second of all, take proficiency of great subject because I could steal knowledge from it for learning. Televison is not for entertaiment only for having a goodtime with collega or relatives, but in television agenda usually put a great subject so that personality could take information and apply it in their live. It is because nowadays, publics are smart and they have favourite subject. They dont just want to spend time just like that in front of television. That is why, set an popular entertainer is good with reason nation has own idol because native usually follow what popular people done. Automaticly, people will do it.
All in all, lifestyle could spread big effection for citizents live because at cinemas or televison share news about existent. Lifestyle change rapidly. Lifestyle is always improve elegance as difference time. Televison or show have to be able to give a good stylish with environment for intoducing new grace. Thus, lifestyle is impact from motion picture.
As a conclude, in my view, flick and teleevision programs have a huge power how they change habit because from picture and give illustration that was impacting society brain. Otherwise, people mostly up to date with will not miss a time.
Sentence: As a result, many stations of television is wanting him to fill one of script so that make interest people who watch.
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Sentence: So, from that I can conclude that inspiration through example in film or programs in televion are useful to adjustment social routine.
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Sentence: As a conclude, in my view, flick and teleevision programs have a huge power how they change habit because from picture and give illustration that was impacting society brain.
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Otherwise, people mostly up to date with will not miss a time.
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Sentence: Movies and television are entertaiment for human.
Error: entertaiment Suggestion: entertainment
Sentence: Certainly they can give an effect because everyone needs relaxation wherefore numerous activities.
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Sentence: Flickers and televison have many ways to make people for changing habit such us give an inspiration, take experience of great people as subject from she/he real life and lifestyle.
Error: televison Suggestion: television
Sentence: At the movies or tube there are numerous of ways how to make good programs, but just a litle trick how to move atittude from bad to be good.
Error: atittude Suggestion: attitude
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Sentence: So, human can immitate and pay attention how was progress is running.
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Sentence: So, from that I can conclude that inspiration through example in film or programs in televion are useful to adjustment social routine.
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Sentence: Televison is not for entertaiment only for having a goodtime with collega or relatives, but in television agenda usually put a great subject so that personality could take information and apply it in their live.
Error: goodtime Suggestion: good time
Error: collega Suggestion: college
Error: entertaiment Suggestion: entertainment
Sentence: All in all, lifestyle could spread big effection for citizents live because at cinemas or televison share news about existent.
Error: televison Suggestion: television
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Sentence: Televison or show have to be able to give a good stylish with environment for intoducing new grace.
Error: intoducing Suggestion: introducing
Sentence: As a conclude, in my view, flick and teleevision programs have a huge power how they change habit because from picture and give illustration that was impacting society brain.
Error: teleevision Suggestion: television
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'All in all' means 'in a conclusion'. You don't need two paragraphs for conclusion.
Still have grammatical issues.
Need to develop the sentences smoothly.
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