It is important for travellers and business people to understand the cultures they come into contact with,however briefly.What are the main advantages of doin so?what do u think is the main disadvantage of not doing so?
There are many cultures which have existed since ancient times.The understanding cultures is vital aspect of travelling as u can easily get in touch with people and it will make your journey fascinating.However,on the contrary it can spoil trip and create completely fallicious image about you nd your country.
In the first phase,it is imperative to acquire other cultures for travellers and business people.In this case they can confidently contact with people and make friends from other cultures.Otherwise,they will not face to problems and their travelling will striking and interesting.If you are businessman or businesswoman it can assist u to succeed in your business.For instance,awerness about Japan culture helped to my uncle to gain alluring contract.
In the second pase,unless you are not knowledgeble about other cultures it means that there are certain drawbacks for you.Then u can spoil your trip such as making arguement with people or you can lost in the city.Likewise,misunderstanding other cultures bad image about you and your country.It is also can fail your business date.For example,when i was in India with my friends we striked monkeys and we had agruement with indian people.Since they think that monkeys are holies.
In conclusion,these advantages and disadvantages will improve people's experience and knowledge about trvelling.In my opinion,travellers and especially business people should get more information about other cultures and country before journey.
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