The map below is of the town of Garlson. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the town map of Garlsdon whose population at 65.000 inhabitants. The map also shows the project of new supermarket where probably is built in that town. There are two possible sites of supermarket project, S1 and S2.
The first site of supermarket (S1) will be located near the countryside besides the housing and crosses the main road. In the middle of housing is the town center which has 10.000 inhabitants at 12 km of the road length to Hindon, so it can been clearly seen that the supermarket will be established in the middle of main roads and railways.
On the other hand, the second supermarket (S2) will be located in the town center where closes to railways. Left and right of the town is the main roads. The right side is surrounded by housing with 29.000 inhabitants and the length of road is about 25 km to Cransdon, whereas there are 15.000 inhabitants in the left side with the road length at 16 km to bransdon.
Interestingly, the position of two supermarkets will be established near the railways and main road. It means that the access to the supermarket will be easier by the transport way.
In short, two supermarkets will probably be built near the countryside and in the town center.
Sentence: The map also shows the project of new supermarket where probably is built in that town.
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Sentence: In the middle of housing is the town center which has 10.000 inhabitants at 12 km of the road length to Hindon, so it can been clearly seen that the supermarket will be established in the middle of main roads and railways.
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