More and more people are becoming seriously overweight Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem To what extent do you agree or disagree

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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The problem of overweight is one of the important and large diseases of our modern world. More than half of population suffers from obesity. Some people think that increasing price of fat-food could solve this problem. Personally, I think this is not enough for solving.

First of all, nowadays more children and teenagers expose to this problem rather than adults. The case is that we live in the world where technologies replace almost everything. Children prefer computer games to football or basketball, some fitness to watching TV and shopping themselves to electronic shops. High technologies eventually kill population. I think that the solving of this problem exists. Parents have to be more severe and forbid to spend a lot of time playing computer games. Some fitness or sport clubs may low their price of training.

Secondly, fat food is more cheerful rather than health one. Now, pizza or hamburgers are more available than fish or vegetables. I think, that consumers have to increase price of fattening foods and in the same time to decrease the cost of more health products. And one more problem is that now the amount of fast-food restaurants is highly rise. To solve this problem will help only if people spot going there and start eating at home wholesome food.

Thirdly, as funny as it sounds, for solving this problem with overweight, we need pets and especially dogs. Only they will compel us to walking or to run in the street, waking up early and add to ours lase lives some move. And it is some sport exercises that we have to do.

In conclusion, I want to say, that obesity is the problem of generation and we have to stop it in any way we can because the consequences are terrible such as diabetes or heart diseases.

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