People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example.
Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.
Currently, one of the most considerable issues is drug usage in all modern societies, especially by the youth ,which has influence on their whole future life. It is well-known fact that every person has been found out about drug`s harm by like witness others` disappeared lifes or some information agents. Opinions are divided as to whether the reason is parents or other members of society, but it is my firm conviction that both of factors have direct responsibility in mentioned undesirable factor because of the reasons below.
It is blatantly obvious that drugs affect on not only its` usages but also others which they witness their neighbours` or familiar people`s live and they also suffer from this situation. Researches indicate that number of died people who suffered from side effects of drug is not low even compare with usage of drugs. If we investigate reason, we will see that most of these youth have not either their mother or father with them That is why parents` cares are the most important issues in decreasing this dayly increased number.
Needless to say that quickly rising number of mafias of drugs has also bad effects on every modern society. This kind of commercial aims which tend them trying to get higher benefit than usual shows itself most of times among schools and derelict teenagers to use their evil aims. Nobody is insured from mentioned intentions, therefore, we should protect ourselves and our children from this effects that can be always around us.
Taking everything into account, due to the facts, I take this view that both parents and societies should pay very close attention to followed effects to protect their and their children`s lifes`.
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Sentence: Nobody is insured from mentioned intentions, therefore, we should protect ourselves and our children from this effects that can be always around us.
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Sentence: Taking everything into account, due to the facts, I take this view that both parents and societies should pay very close attention to followed effects to protect their and their childrens lifes.
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Sentence: If we investigate reason, we will see that most of these youth have not either their mother or father with them That is why parents cares are the most important issues in decreasing this dayly increased number.
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Sentence: This kind of commercial aims which tend them trying to get higher benefit than usual shows itself most of times among schools and derelict teenagers to use their evil aims.
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