The pie chart and table below give information on tourist arrivals in Nepal in March 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie chart and table below give information on tourist arrivals in Nepal in March 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart tells about the origin country of tourists in Nepal in March 2008, while the table explain growth of visitors several in March 2008.

In March 2008, the three biggest foreign people were Asia, Europe and others regions at 38%, 37%, and 10% each. North and South America were in the fourth place at 10% and the last was Australia at 4%.

Most of regions’ ranks increased and were different with the rank in March 2008-Europe from the second to the first chart at +3,321, North and South America from the fourth to the second place at +1,043, Australia from the fifth to the fourth at +426. Asia decreased from the first place to the last at +188. Other regions was still in the in the third level at +932. Total of the visitors increasing are 5,910 people.

Overall, all several of visitors in the Nepal moved up in 2008. Europe region always in the top of the chart.

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Sentence: The pie chart tells about the origin country of tourists in Nepal in March 2008, while the table explain growth of visitors several in March 2008.
Description: The fragment table explain growth is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace explain with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular

Sentence: In March 2008, the three biggest foreign people were Asia, Europe and others regions at 38, 37, and 10 each.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and regions

Sentence: Other regions was still in the in the third level at 932.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a preposition
Suggestion: Refer to the and in

Other regions was still
Other regions were still

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