The reason for study among students in different age groups and the amount of support from employers.

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The reason for study among students in different age groups and the amount of support from employers.

The charts show the main reasons for study among students in different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

In general, the percentage of reasons for study according to age of students which choose for career are downward trend. However, in other reason for interest are upward trend in under 26 until over 49. Then, the percentage of employer support are fluctuating for over the age.

As we see in the chart, the percentage of reasons for study to get good career is 80 % in under 26. Then, the percentage are decrease by 10 % to 70 % in age 26-29.
Next, the age 30 – over 49, the percentages still fall down until in the lowest percentage reason for career is under 20 %.
In contrast, the reason for study by student for interest rise up over the age. The that is slightly increase in all of the age until in age over 49, it is stand up in 70 %.

Moreover, the percentage of employer support in age under 26 is 70%. Then it is go down by 20 % to 50% in age under 26 and fall again by 15 % in 35 %. Next, it is go up in age 40 – over 49 in 45 %.

Overall, at the beginning the reason for study for career is the good reason for student in under 26 but for age over 49 the good reason for study is for interest. Then the best age for employer support is under 26.

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in other reason for interest are upward trend
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Sentence: Then, the percentage of employer support are fluctuating for over the age.
Description: The fragment of employer support is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a preposition
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Sentence: Then, the percentage are decrease by 10 to 70 in age 26-29.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is

Sentence: In contrast, the reason for study by student for interest rise up over the age.
Description: The fragment interest rise up is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace rise with verb, past tense

Sentence: The that is slightly increase in all of the age until in age over 49, it is stand up in 70 .
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Sentence: Then it is go down by 20 to 50 in age under 26 and fall again by 15 in 35 .
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Sentence: Next, it is go up in age 40 over 49 in 45 .
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Suggestion: Refer to is and go

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No. of Words: 247 350

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Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 247 350
No. of Characters: 995 1500
No. of Different Words: 90 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.964 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.227 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 12 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.899 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.451 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.163 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4