Research Indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Researches might conclude that our genes have more emphasis on our individuality than our learnings from experiences. I strongly doctrine and ruminate that its our experiences which chisel our personalities and make us what we are. Lets confer this in detail.
First and foremost reason according to my thinking is that, whatever things we do or decide to do, depends on our past experiences. Our decisions, whether congenial or atrocious are based on our past situations and not really on what our genes instruct us to do. For Instance while taking any step , we first explore our memory and try to reminisce the similar situations and actions we have taken in past and based on our preference and judgment we conclude our present and future actions. Our genes might decide our physical appearances but not our emotional and psychological quintessences.
Secondly, I doctrine that our upbringing, society, culture and traditions have lot of emphasis on our over all development and Individuality. For Instance, In India, women are given treated unadulterated due to existence of numerous Goddesses Hindus worship. Our beliefs, avidity etc are he consequents of our society in which we are raised. Another example is, it is believed that many punjabis are sports person, its because of their food habits and involvement of physical activity for farming which instruments them to be fit and have toned body, Genes have no role to play. Another example based on my observations is that SouthIndians are believed to be most Intelligent in our country, However when I observed closely their ways of living, I realized that they bringup their children with strict discipline making their efforts inclined more towards studies resulting them to be more Intelligent and witty. There are many more examples like this.
To sum up, I would like to say that Genes might have influence on our skin colour, height and other physical appearances but have very limited emphasis on our personalities and our beings.
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