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It is not uncommon these days that the universities in many countries across the world enlarge the number of enrollments,which might be a beneficial way to contribute to the nations.However,some people claim that this way will raise the unemployment rate of graduates.

Evidently,academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career,especially when the competition in the job market is becoming increasingly harsh.Rising up the percentage of young individuals who will enter the universities may not only afford more people the opportunities of acquiring knowledge,but it also may improve their competitive abilities in their countries as well as the international world.Moreover,a country may profit from high percentage of the college graduates as they have the strong awareness of basic law and morality,which may help the nation develop safe and stable.

Even so ,it is obvious that not all the students graduate from university can be employed.For instance,someone who do not behave well in the college may not find the job when he/she graduate.However,if the universities create better academic atmosphere,improve the quality of teaching and fulfill the students’ potential,the most graduates would finally get a decent job instead of being the members of unemployed men.

Overall,in my opinion,although the high percentage of young people go to university may lead to some of them unemployed when they graduate,with the educating quality advanced and the great efforts the young people have made,they will finally find their position in the society and contribute to their countries.

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I read the essay and understand the structure of the essay is the essay asked for. and sentences are not bad.

i am just wondering is there a different way to write this kind of essay? i mean the structure of the essay.

thanks,

Sentence: It is not uncommon these days that the universities in many countries across the world enlarge the number of enrollments,which might be a beneficial way to contribute to the nations.However,some people claim that this way will raise the unemployment rate of graduates.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a determiner/pronoun, plural
Suggestion: Refer to uncommon and these
Description: The fragment world enlarge the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace enlarge with verb, past tense
Sentence: Evidently,academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career,especially when the competition in the job market is becoming increasingly harsh.Rising up the percentage of young individuals who will enter the universities may not only afford more people the opportunities of acquiring knowledge,but it also may improve their competitive abilities in their countries as well as the international world.Moreover,a country may profit from high percentage of the college graduates as
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by an End of sentence
Suggestion: Refer to as
Sentence: they have the strong awareness of basic law and morality,which may help the nation develop safe and stable.
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Sentence: Even so ,it is obvious that not all the students graduate from university can be employed.For instance,someone who do not behave well in the college may not find the job when he/she graduate.However,if the universities create better academic atmosphere,improve the quality of teaching and fulfill the students' potential,the most graduates would finally get a decent job instead of being the members of unemployed men.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and graduate
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to she and graduate
Sentence: Overall,in my opinion,although the high percentage of young people go to university may lead to some of them unemployed when they graduate,with the educating quality advanced and the great efforts the young people have made,they will finally find their position in the society and contribute to their countries.
Description: The fragment Overall , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace Overall with adverb