Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, most of the people has assumption that in they live not need different. Live more better far from change. However, sometimes different think even given that best things. In here Indonesia, different is proper and according to change thing perhaps create changes. In this essay I will examine about several issues.
Firstly, sometimes same thinks good to they lives and makes somethings not have different. Several people always constant when doing they lives. They cannot take risk with changes and still obedient with this ways. Comfortable zone make they difficult to go out and continue stayed in this way. Change things almost same like take risk and this unpredictable result. For example, to get result of harvest rice farmers need new fertilizer. On the other side, they never try this fertilizer before. In order to farmers not suffering with new experiment, they still used old way to avoid something new. More better getting same result than expectation new ways which not yet get evidence.
Secondly, change thinking to accept new something and new result instead. There are several people has overview to get different result they has new ways as well. During they go on with same things they will obtain same result too. Moreover, people who desire get something new and something result, suggested for them to change their mind and behavior. For example, when once entrepreneur with old concept get revenue averages Rp 15,000,000 per/month. However, if they will get Rp 30,000,000 per/month so they need change new ways and new decision to getting well result.
In conclusion, something and change thing will create as a result. Although, this only opinion depend on people who running their live. To get something new, should people try new something to get better result. Probably this same as gambling but not mistake if we try new ways.
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Sentence: However, sometimes different think even given that best things.
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Sentence: Firstly, sometimes same thinks good to they lives and makes somethings not have different.
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Sentence: Several people always constant when doing they lives.
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Sentence: They cannot take risk with changes and still obedient with this ways.
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Sentence: Change things almost same like take risk and this unpredictable result.
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Sentence: During they go on with same things they will obtain same result too.
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Sentence: For example, when once entrepreneur with old concept get revenue averages Rp 15,000,000 per/month.
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Sentence: Although, this only opinion depend on people who running their live.
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Sentence: Firstly, sometimes same thinks good to they lives and makes somethings not have different.
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