Some people regard video games harmless fun or even as a useful educational tools. Other, however, believe that video games are having and adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefit.

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Some people regard video games harmless fun or even as a useful educational tools. Other, however, believe that video games are having and adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefit.

Nowadays, video game is one of the most popular thing in social life especially for children. Some people believe that video games are useful as educational tools. However, the others claim that they just have negative effect on people who play them. This essay would argue that negative effects of the video games outweight the positive effects because they tend to make the player become addicted.

Some education systems apply the video games as educational tools because they could make the students are interested to study the subjects. The teachers also believe that they are easy to transfer their knowledge by using video games because they consist of audio and visual features. For example, students learn English subjects by playing scrable games in the computer. Students could easily memorize the vocabularies from the games because they are interested to play while studying the subjects.

On the contrary, the others believe that video games only bring negative effects to people who play them because the players tend to be addicted to play it more and more.
The addicted people would spend much time to play the games and they would not do their other activities such as work and study. As a result, the students could not improve their academic ability in the school and the workers do not have good perform in the office.

In addition, people who spend much time playing games could have low healthy level in their life. They do not do sport anymore even they could not manage well their diet because they just use their time to play video games. For example, the students who play video games in their rooms in the whole day would not doing sport outside and they tend to delay to eat.

To sum up, video games could bring much disadvantages for people who play them because they could effect to the academic, perform and healthy problems. People should manage their time well in having relaxing time by playing game and parents have to control their children’s time to play video games.

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video game is one of the most popular thing...
video game is one of the most popular things...

because they could make the students are interested to study the subjects.
because they could make the students interested to study the subjects.

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