Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that children should learn to be a good member to society. Being a good member to society involves good characters, these skills need to be learn as this doesn't come with us when we are born, these can be taught at home environment or during the school hours. I believe that parents can teach to young people effectively.

On the one hand, there is an argument that parents should teach younger people how to be a good member to society. Firstly parents are being the role model to children , they learn all about behaviors and how to get on with others. They do not easily forget what they learn from their parents. In the childhood up to 5 years are more important, during that period children learn more thing about others, in that period parents can easily teach to their children good behavior that their children want to archive.

On the other hand, we can’t forget about the school’s responsibility on children’s character. Firstly, In school, teachers are trained to guide the children ,this enable children to learn proper behaviors. For example, In Europe countries there are some playschools and preschools aims to teach children good behavior to prepare them to become good member of society. Finally without schools some children would not learn proper guides ,because from uneducated parents very difficult to expect proper guide.

In conclusion, From parents and schools children can learn about the behavior to be good member to society. It seems to me that parents involvement on children character could be better

Votes
Average: 7.3 (7 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Sentence: Firstly, In school, teachers are trained to guide the children ,this enable children to learn proper behaviors.
Description: The fragment this enable children is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace enable with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular

flaws:
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1255 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200

'On the other hand' means However. It doesn't mean 'On another hand'.

Read essays by top users:
http://www.testbig.com/users/sfaht1
http://www.testbig.com/users/tessy-james
http://www.testbig.com/users/nader
http://www.testbig.com/users/subodh860

and more:
http://www.testbig.com/essay-categories/ielts

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1255 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.808 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.386 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.633 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.19 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5