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Some people think that the role of women in the military or police forces is very relevant and becoming more significant. Others argue the opposite. Do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?


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By devabe2005 - Posted on 10 February 2013

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Some people think that the role of women in the military or police forces is very relevant and becoming more significant. Others argue the opposite. Do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

Women role in military or police forces are excellent, extra-ordinary, intelligent and multi-tasking in their tasks. Some people believe that women role is appropriate and their services to military or police service is necessary while others oppose it. I completely agree that women are necessary for military or police forces to serve and protect nation and criminals. In my opinion, women play a pertinent role similar to men in tracing and attacking militants and criminals.

In general, women are good in multi-tasking. So that they are very useful in tracing as well as attacking enemies on time and protect their nation. For example, In India many women are joining in military forces as they are capable of fighting against criminals and trace the terrorist to safeguard their nation. So that women role is very important in military forces.

Moreover, women in police service are excellent in inspecting and knock down the criminals. They are both mentally and physically fit to handle criminals. For example, Tamil Nadu women Inspector of police service from India, Thilagavathy had won many rewards for reducing criminal activity in the state and she faced many encounter of criminals similar to men. Thus it is clear, that women role is necessary to decrease crimes.

In a nutshell, women plays significant role in military and police services. As they are passionate, service-oriented, honest, confident, energetic, good at management, motivator, inspirational, vigilant parallel to men and serve well for their country to protect from enemies and criminals. They are god created creature similar to men lets respect, appreciate, guide, obey and salute for their service and sacrifice to the human kind.

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Sentence: Women role in military or police forces are excellent, extra-ordinary, intelligent and multi-tasking in their tasks.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Women`s roles

and their services to military or police service is necessary
Suggestion:and their services to military or police service are necessary

Sentence: Some people believe that women role is appropriate and their services to military or police service is necessary while others oppose it.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Women`s role

Sentence: So that women role is very important in military forces.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Women`s role

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Different Words: 131 200

Expand your ideas with more words in the essay body.

Before you put examples, you need more arguments: why you think `women are good in multi-tasking`? why you think `women in police service are excellent in inspecting and knock down the criminals`?

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1406 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.169 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.769 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5