Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged Others believe that children who are taught to co operate rather than compete become more useful adults

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

In this modern area, some people say that competition is useful for people in working. So, for parent they must teach their children to be competitive person in the future. However, there is other reason that children are also taught to be sociable in order to be more benefit.

In general, competition and cooperation are the needed for people in the future day. Children who just have the competitive mind, they only think their selves. They do not care their environment. To be compete become the children more aggressive. They do as they want.

On the other hand, kids who just have sociable mind also will get negative effect. Although they are easy to help people, sometimes they are easy to be lain by their friends. They cannot difference between good and bad thing. They think that they want to help without fees. It is good, but if they were in a business, they will get the disadvantages.

Thus, these two things are very important for them and become the modals for them in reaching their dream. Parents have to understand and to encourage their potencies. Moreover, they have to get good education from parents, teachers and neighborhood.

To put them in a nutshell, to be competitor and helpful people are capital for people. This modal must be exercised from they were small. Parents who give the great education for their boys and girls, in many years later, they will become the proud children for them. And also parents should not be afraid to pay much cost, because they will change with their incredible result. Kids are investment in old age.

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Sentence: This modal must be exercised from they were small.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular
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Sentence Length SD: 4.937 7.5

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