Task1: The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Task1: The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by thanh hoa on Mon, 09/23/2013 - 06:52

A glance at the two pie charts provided reveals the number of money is income and expense of USA on children's welfare. In general, food donated to the majority of the revenue, while program services accounted for the most expenditure.

According to the two pie charts, the great proportion of taking source was donated by food with 86.8 percent. Similarly, with exceeding 95%, program services were nearly all spending.

The other categories were much smaller. The second largest income source after donated food was community contributions with 10.4%, followed by program revenue at 2.2%. Investment income and government grants contributed equally to taking source with 0.8%, and others income were very small sources of revenue.

In other expenditures, fundraising and management and general accounted for 2.6% and 1.6% respectively. An interesting note is that the total amount of income was $53,561,580, which was just enough to cover the expense of $53,224,896.

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Sentence: Investment income and government grants contributed equally to taking source with 0.8, and others income were very small sources of revenue.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and income

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