We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business,hospitals,crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Compare to olden days, The human being life has changed. Also, technology has changed. In this phenemenon, most of the time the human being is depending on one technology that is computers. In this time, the relation between computer and human being has just like a family relation ship. The computer innovation has totally changed the world. It has just like world has one side and computer technology has other side.
First of fall, The dependence on computers is a good thing because in human being life time is occupy most important part. For example you will take bank sector in this scenario you want to deposit on your money in your account. You have to go bank and fill the deposit slip and wait for the cashier in this total process you have to spend one to two hours time. But, if you have own computer with internet in your home the process will have completed in just 5 to 10 minutes with online transaction. In this total scenario, you have to observe one common thing. In bank the cashier uses computer and your also uses computer.
Secondly, In future the usage of computers will be increasing. In present time the robot's designing depends on computers. The making of robotics is using with computers. But, In future, I expect the robotics will use own computer. However, the lot of benefits is there by using computers. It might be used in corporate sectors,hospitals,industries,education and also used in film making. And some drawbacks are also there like you are spending a lot of time with computers you got some health problems.
To sum up, to describe in one word about computers here, it is supposed that if you have own computer, the whole world is in your hands. The utilization of computer in good way you got lot of benefits and the utilisation of computer in bad way you got lot of bad benefits also. So, in my point of view if the technology will reach everest the crucial part will be playing computers only in the future.
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Sentence: In present time the
Sentence: In present time the robots designing is depends on computers.
Suggestion: In present time the robot's designing depends on computers.
Sentence: To sum up, to describe a one word about computers here it is suppose you have own computer the whole world is in your hands.
Suggestion: To sum up, to describe in one word about computers here, it is supposed that if you have your own computers, the whole world is in your hands.
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Sentence: In present time the robots designing is depends on computers.
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Sentence: To sum up, to describe a one word about computers here it is suppose you have own computer the whole world is in your hands.
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Sentence: In this phenemenon, most of the time the human being is depending on one technology that is computers.
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Sentence: But, In futute, I expect the robotics will use own computer.
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Sentence: The utilisation of computer in good way you got lot of benefits and the utilisation of computer in bad way you got lot of bad benefits also.
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Sentence: So, in my point of view if the technology will reache everest the crucial part will be playing computers only in the future.
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