Writing task 1

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Writing task 1

The First bar graph illustrates the two main reasons for study according to age of the students (under 26- over 49), and second bar graph demonstrates the employer support, by age group. The figures are measured in percentages. It is immediately apparent that youngsters are obtaining education for career while the older people are receiving education for interest.

To begin with, below 26 year old people was receiving education for the career, at 80% with the increasing age this ratio was decreasing. 70% people were obtaining education at age 26-29, 65% at 30-39. At age 40-49 the ratio was similar for acquisition of the knowledge. In contrast, only 10% people were receiving education in younger age for interest that was opposite for over the 49 year old people, the figure was the 70%.

In second graph, Employer had supported 60% people under the age of 26, the percentage gradually decreased for 26-29 and 30 -39 at 50% and 30% respectively. The figure inclined for 40-49 and over 49 year old people at 35% and 45 %. It is unclear whether employer support was only for career-focused study or the highest level was for those students who mainly study for career purpose.

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Don't guess something from the graphs like:
It is unclear whether employer support was only for career-focused study or the highest level was for those students who mainly study for career purpose.

Write whatever you see.

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Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 200 200
No. of Characters: 947 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.761 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.735 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.66 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 48 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.149 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4