You are hereYou have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months.You now realize that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room.Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send

You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months.You now realize that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room.Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send


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You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realize that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you. Offer to cover the costs.

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Hooper,

I hope you are all well. The flight home seemed very long but my family all came to meet me at the airpoint, which was fantastic. Thank you so much for having me - I enjoy my time with you very much.

I have a favour to ask. When I got home, I realised that I had left a small black handbag in my bedroom. You may recall that I bought myself a new bag while I was in Sydney and I'm pretty sure I put the old one under the bed.

I don't really need the bag but some of the things inside are of sentimental value and I would be very grateful if you could send them to me. There is a red address book, a small leather wallet with some photos and a silver ...

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