You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city.
Write a letter of application to the tourism office. In the letter:
- give your reasons for wanting the job
- explain why you think you can do the job
- describe any relevant experience you have
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to apply a job in your company. I saw this job in your website which was explained a requirement that you would need tour guides.
I am Irfan Saputra 23 years old. I graduated from Education of Tourism Bachelor's Degree Hasanuddin University in March 2012. I succeed to get an achievement as the best graduation with GPA 3.7 of 4.
I am sure that this position is suitable with my background education that I have been interested to hold this work. I have been relevant sources that I could perform this job which is about interesting places with historical stories, a good English literature and communication with new people. Besides, I have ability to use a Microsoft Office.
Recently, I have been working as an administration at a local business. In my last job, I always communicated with vendors from United Kingdom and I enjoy talking with them.
I wish you would consider with my application, and I look forward news to hear from you.
Yours faithfully,
Irfan Saputra
and I look forward news to hear from you.
suggestion: and I look forward news to hearing from you.
flaws:
Some sentences are not developed smoothly. like:
I saw this job in your website which was explained a requirement that you would need tour guides.
I am sure that this position is suitable with my background education that I have been interested to hold this work.
I have been relevant sources that I could perform this job which is about interesting places with historical stories...
mainly because 'which' and 'that' are not used properly.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 170 200
No. of Characters: 779 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.582 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.867 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 51 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 43 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.614 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.182 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.451 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.715 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.211 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4