You work for an international company. Recently your job has changed and you believe that more training is needed. Write a letter to your manager and say- How has your job changed?- Describe a type of training you will need.- Suggest the arrangements inco

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You work for an international company. Recently your job has changed and you believe that more training is needed. Write a letter to your manager and say
- How has your job changed?
- Describe a type of training you will need.
- Suggest the arrangements incorporating training and your work.

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Mari and I am writing in regard to my new duties as a programmer at this company.

Previously, I have designed web pages with C# but now I am charge of report maker team. The main database that this team uses is My SQL so they have to use Oracle to implement their reports. Unfortunately, I have not enough information and experience how to work with Oracle and I need a few hours training about how I can use Oracle to build a report and how can I use Oracle to connect to My SQL database. Therefore, I would like to have one month training.

As you know, I am a full time worker and meanwhile I have applied for some part time courses, so I have not very free time. I am available every Monday from 2pm until 6 pm. I know I have to adjust my time with trainer's time, but I am being glad if you can arrange me at this time.

Please confirm me if this arrangement is suitable as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,
Mari.

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Sentence: Previously, I have designed web pages with C but now I am charge of report maker team.
Description: A verb 'to be', present tense, 1st person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to am and charge

Sentence: As you know, I am full time worker and meanwhile I have applied for some part time courses, so I have not very free time.
Description: The fragment am full time is rare
Suggestion: I am a full time worker

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Category: Good Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 179 200
No. of Characters: 709 1000
No. of Different Words: 102 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.658 4.0
Average Word Length: 3.961 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.388 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.539 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.726 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.216 0.07
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